Monday, January 25, 2010

short story. Seize Each Day.




Sean Rondeau

C Block

Seize Each Day

“Paul! Paul! Mr. White please get up before I kick you out of my class!” said Ms. Sullivan in truculent voice.

Paul evasively replied, “I’m up, I’m up don’t throw a fit.” Paul had just got to his first class after showing up thirty minutes late. Paul just didn’t care about school. He was failing most of his classes, skipping classes, talking back, and not showing up to school. Throughout the rest of the day, Paul created his usual distractions and disturbances in class. At lunchtime, he ran into the person he hated most, Dexter Winfield. He and Dexter nearly got in a fight before it being broken up by teachers. Dexter and Paul had been best friends until a couple of years ago when Dexter tried to vilify his reputation. Both are too obstinate to apologize.


After cutting school a bit early with his pal John, Paul went to his house to drink even though he was only a senior. Seven beers later, Paul was drunk and had past out in his room. After being unconscious for a couple of hours, he had heard the phone ring. It was his grandma. He and his grandma had been very close until Paul became aloofed from her and started doing drugs. Ever since, his grandma has been doleful. He heard Grandma’s voice say, “Paul, I haven’t seen you in a while. I was wondering if you could come visit me at the nursing home. I need some company.”

Paul responded with a bit of a slur, “Yeah sure grandma, I’ll be there in two hours. See you then.” Paul once again blew off his grandma for the second time this week. Paul’s wizened grandma, in her late eighty’s, was diagnosed with cancer and is in the process of dying. That night, Paul didn’t even bother to attempt his onerous homework.

The next day after Paul was late again, the principal of Northwest High, Mr. Jenkins called Paul into his room. Mr. Jenkins said, “Paul, you are failing almost all of your classes, showing up late, and cutting school. It just doesn’t seem like you care.”

He replied, “Mr. Jenkins I don’t care about school.”

“Mr. White, you also don’t care about life. I’ve heard rumors about what you have been doing outside of school. How do you plan on getting into college on the way your going?”

“Mr. J., I don’t plan on going to college.” Mr. Jenkins’s harangue went on for about ten more minutes. After the rebuttal, Paul stormed out of the room and slammed the door. Mr. Jenkins knew he couldn’t do anything about this because he thought Paul was incorrigible. When Paul got home from school he watched TV until it was midnight when his beaten up phone rang. It was John. Paul then grabbed his wallet and snuck out of the door while his parents were sleeping. He was going to John’s to smoke.

On the walk there on the foggy night, Paul decided to take a shortcut through the park. As he was walking, he saw three men with hoods approaching him. Paul just kept walking. Once he got closer to the three mysterious men, they converged on him and the man in the middle said, “Give me everything in your pockets!”

Paul then trying to be tough said, “What if I don’t?” The man in the middle then pulled a gun out of his pocket and put it to Paul’s head. Paul was scared out his mind and his fear pervaded throughout his whole body. Paul pleaded him not to shoot. He was coerced to pull everything out of his pockets including his wallet that had 150 bucks in it, his cell phone, a pack of lifesavers, and even his pocket lint. The man put his gun away and the three men beat Paul until he was unconscious. In the morning, a man walking his dog saw Paul on the ground and immediately called the police. Once Paul woke up, he realized he needed to cherish life everyday and live each day like it was his last.

Over the remaining five months of the school year, Paul got to school on time, participated in every class, and didn’t talk back to his teachers. Paul even apologized to Dexter and they became friends again. Paul said to himself, “Life’s too short to have enemies.” Each day when Paul got home, he did all of his homework and even studied for his tests. He then called his grandma back and went to visit her before she was gone. He watched the sunset with her and loved every moment. From the day he was jumped until his grandma died a month later, Paul watched the sunset with her everyday. The day before she died, she told Paul to live life to the fullest and seize each day. Paul also made an oath to himself to quit drugs and alcohol. Paul also brought his grades up and got accepted into the local state college. Paul turned his dull future into something sanguine. Paul finally started to appreciate life.

5 comments:

  1. Vocabulary Words-
    truculent, evasive, vilify, obstinate, aloof, doleful, wizen, onerous, harangue, rebuttal, incorrigible, converged, pervaded, coerced, sanguine.

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  2. The conflict in this story is that Paul is getting into trouble in school and just not caring about his future. He is also drinking and using drugs. It is internal because he can change how much he cares about school work and he can control his use of illegal substances. It was resolved when Paul gets jumped and nearly beaten to death. He then realizes he needs to live every day to its fullest. The protagonist is Paul and he changes over time because he goes from not caring about school and making bad choices. Then he starts working hard and stops using drugs. The story would be different if the character didn't have his epiphany after being jumped to turn his life around because his grandma would've lived the last month probably without seeing him and Paul wouldn't have gotten into a college.My favorite part of the story is the resolution when it shows Paul's life changed around. "The day before she died, she told Paul to live life to the fullest and seize each day." This is a quote I liked because it shows the message of the story. This short stories best quality is the description. I feel it is its description because when Paul is walking through the park it takes about the foggy night and the three hooded figures. I can see this scene in my head. This stories theme is to live each day to its fullest. The author plants the seed of the dyeing grandmother in the story. In the end Paul spends every day for a month watching the sunset with her. I feel that Sean doesn't need to revise anything. This story is extremely well written.

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  3. The conflict in the story is that Paul is lazy and doesn't care about the future. He is getting into drugs and alcohol. It is internal because he must get his life and how he do in and out of school. The resolution is when Paul gets jumped. Then he has an epiphany and realizes just how precious life is. The story would be different if the character did not have that epiphany and he would of not changed. The stories theme is that you have to live life everyday and to the fullest. It is how Paul spends more time with his grandmother. I agree with other reviews it is well written.

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  4. The conflict of the story was that Paul was going down the wrong road and doing drugs. The conflict was internel and was resolved by paul getting jumped and then valuing his life more. The main character changed by valuing life more and bringing up his grades, quit drugs, and visited his dying grandma more often. The story would be different if the character didnt change because then there wouldn't be any message or moral to the story. My favorite part was when he was jumped. It occured in the climax or highest point of dramatic tension. “Give me everything in your pockets!” I liked thuis quote because it showed how much action the story has. The tales best quality is that it has a lot of dialogue and that you know what is happening in each scene. The story's theme is that to live life to the fullest. The author shows how paul is a big thug but then turns his life around in the end. The span of time that he writes the story in. I think that you should work on the plot of your story specifically the exposion and resolution.

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  5. The conflict in this story is that Paul is getting into trouble and doesn't seem to care about anything and he is drinking and using drugs. It is internal conflict because he can change how much he cares about school work, he is battling problems within himself, and he can control his use of illegal substances. It was resolved when Paul gets jumped and nearly beaten to death and He then realizes he needs to be thankful for every day and enjoy life. The protagonist is Paul and he changes over time because he goes from not caring about school and making bad choices to working hard and stop using drugs. The story would be different if the character didn't have his epiphany after being jumped to turn his life around because his grandma would've lived the last month probably without seeing him and Paul wouldn't have gotten into a college.My favorite part of the story is the resolution when it shows Paul's life changed around. "The day before she died, she told Paul to live life to the fullest and seize each day." This is a quote I liked because it shows the message of the story. This short stories best quality is the description because when Paul is walking through the park it talks about the foggy night and the three hooded figures and it gives me a good picture in my mind. This stories theme is to live each day to its fullest. In the end Paul spends every day for a month watching the sunset with her. This story is extremely well written.

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